스트레스 해소의 장점으로 게임을 주제로 삼았는데

Most of all, it is possible to relieve stress in a short time.
In my case, I usually play a computer game with my friends once a week on weekends.
Because, I don’t have to worry about something such as studying and getting a job.
And it is more convenient to play it with them than meeting face to face.
Also, I usually spend time about 10 minutes to play computer games.
So, I am able to __refresh__ myself in a short time / it takes a short time to relieve stress
As a result, I can concentrate on studying more over.

첨삭 가능할까요??

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또한, And it is more convenient to play it with them than meeting face to face. 이 문장이 맞는 지 모르겠습니다.

항상 첨삭해주셔서 늘 감사하게 생각하고 있습니다 ~